What did you learn we Learn how to write a recount
What did you enjoy writing about the A&P show
What was challenging adding punctuation to my writing
What was easy put my writing on a slide
What will you do next time finsh in the time givin
Sunday, November 1, 2020
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Kia ora Tyran. I loved reading your recount of your trip to the A&P show. Your description of your feelings of nervousness when you arrived to the sound of screams took me back to when I was your age, going to my first A&P show in Whakatāne. Those fast moving rides sound utterly horrendous to me now. I can't believe you ate a hotdog covered in sauce after going on the Round Up! I would've been sick! In answer to your question, "Would you go on the Turbo Boost in 2021?" I reply, "Kāo".
ReplyDeleteOne question I have is, did you actually wait for 4 hours to go on the Turbo Boost? Or is that an example of hyperbole? I'd love it if you could look up the definition of hyperbole and let me know.
Looking at your learning goals, I was surprised to see that you found adding punctuation to your writing challenging. I thought you did a great job. The only thing I noticed was Slide 4 was missing an 'I' at the start. Maybe it fell off during editing. Your slides are well designed with good use of colour and visuals. I look forward to reading more of your awesome writing.
Ka mau te wehi!
Jennifer Dann
Hello Tyran
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your A.M.P show writing. I enjoyed hearing how much fun you had because i didn't go to the A.M.P show. Ka mau te wehi!
JOrdan Edwards
Thank you Jennifer dann for your amazing comment. I really appreciate your comment. yes I did wait 4 hours and I will go on the turbo boost in 2021
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